From P&P 2009 draft (unedited)
"Mouche dragged me back into the pool. We lounged under the night lights on Wednesday’s huge, plastic, floating goldfish. Mouche dragged me around with her until we were playing whirlpool and before we knew it, we were having a water fight about whose ideas ruled..."
(The characters in my story go swimming a lot! I've been reading over an earlier (unedited) draft of Pride & Princesses (written in 2009) and I'm going to post some sections over the next few days, mostly parts which weren't (for whatever reasons) included in the final draft. I'm not sure anyone could ever tell another person how to write a novel (although many have tried!) but it's an interesting process to look back on how a novel starts in the drafting process and how it finishes up.)
